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a story by me!!! EDITED BY:Toxic95 (if anyone wants to convert this story into a flash movie tell me)

Posted by rash12 - October 12th, 2009


One day there was a planet called EXOZIT human didn't know that because it had high technology!
The power generator of the planet is named EXOZIT that's why the planet is called exozit ......then the EXOZIT was lost during a war on the planet and it went to... ...Earth!
it entered the earth and when it fell someone saw it he ran into the place that it fell in and saw a shiny purple thing then he touched it and he changed into a super purple man he destroyed everything that stops in his way and all the world's armies attacked him until he died but the EXOZIT was not destroyed then the planet exozit knew that it went the earth so they went after it
...They attacked earth!!!!

people are dying And presidents of the world are dying and armies are attacking a mysterious man that appeared suddenly and made a super doper nuclear missile and he had a large army of robots! He found the EXOZIT and took it and then he fired the super nuclear missile on earth and he destroyed it but he didn't know the power of the EXOZIT! And he escaped from earth in a large spaceship with his large army hoping to find another suitable planet to live on!!! until he found exozit planet... ...meanwhile there was some survivors that managed to escape before the destruction of earth and they went to another planet that looked like earth then the man attacked exozit planet with his army and took over most of it and he killed some of exozit planet's people and destroyed some buildings and made a huge base to defend himself and then he started researching on the EXOZIT to know its power then a man from exozit planet contacted the exozit army that was attacking the earth and told them that the man attacked the planet and that he had the EXOZIT and on the way to exozit planet they found the survivors and told them that they needed their help so they all attacked the man on exozit planet and they defeated his army after a huge crazy war but they didn't find the EXOZIT!!!! So exozit people told the survivors that they can live with them on the planet although it had no power so they won't have high technology but the survivors wanted to rebuild earth!!!!! So they went to the place where the earth was destroyed with some spaceships, weapons and resources that they took from exozit planet and they were amazed ,they found that the earth was rebuild and it had high technology and it was full of many purple aliens and they were living happily and the survivors was like: WHAT THE HELL!!??? And then they found out that the EXOZIT was a living thing and it rebuilt the earth and made cities and it reproduced but this was another EXOZIT!!! And they still didn't know where is the other EXOZIT!! That means that there are 2 EXOZIT THE END OR MAYBE NOT (IF U WANT A REST FOR THE STORY JUST TELL ME AND I WILL MAKE IT)

a story by me!!! EDITED BY:Toxic95 (if anyone wants to convert this story into a flash movie tell me)


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i'm sorry, but this is very hard to follow. tips for writing.
1. always when one is writing, one must use PROPER GRAMMAR and spelling.
2. a story, even if it is an outline or a draft, must have soem form of a build to it.
3. characters? or is it just some guy and purple people?

i bet if you spent just a little more time with this, you could make it ALOT better.

thnx sniperleader1337 but anyway did you enjoy it?!

I have to agree with sniperleader1337. Proper paragraph structure, spelling, grammar are all things that make it easier for people to read and follow.
This really needs to be built up. Characters, a easier to follow plot, as this just seemed much to random and didn't entirely make sense.

there r characters: the exozit,the mysteriuos man and the evil guy.

i have repaired some things if there any thing u dont understand plz tell me in a pm or in comment hey sniperleader tell me in pm!

ur illusion is cool, but everyone knows the stare at a thing and you see them in white then, thing

thnx! but its blamed :'(

umm and what will happen?

they found that the exozit is an alive creature and all the people will live in exozit2 with the exozits(purple things)