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rash12
Aly @rash12

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Joined on 5/10/08

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i'm sorry, but this is very hard to follow. tips for writing.
1. always when one is writing, one must use PROPER GRAMMAR and spelling.
2. a story, even if it is an outline or a draft, must have soem form of a build to it.
3. characters? or is it just some guy and purple people?

i bet if you spent just a little more time with this, you could make it ALOT better.

thnx sniperleader1337 but anyway did you enjoy it?!

I have to agree with sniperleader1337. Proper paragraph structure, spelling, grammar are all things that make it easier for people to read and follow.
This really needs to be built up. Characters, a easier to follow plot, as this just seemed much to random and didn't entirely make sense.

there r characters: the exozit,the mysteriuos man and the evil guy.

i have repaired some things if there any thing u dont understand plz tell me in a pm or in comment hey sniperleader tell me in pm!

ur illusion is cool, but everyone knows the stare at a thing and you see them in white then, thing

thnx! but its blamed :'(

umm and what will happen?

they found that the exozit is an alive creature and all the people will live in exozit2 with the exozits(purple things)